Do you believe in Fate? And if you do, ever known what happens when Fate toys with you...
She was his,
He had nothing to lose.
Fate decided to play a fall;
A plot- where he could not choose.
And then she came,
To fill the void in his life.
Life a whiff of fresh air,
Putting an end to his inner strife!
She was angelic,
Far too ethereal to be his mate.
Fate, but grimly smiled;
The fish had taken the bait.
Happy times, or so they seemed;
Her essence had him floored.
Little was he to know,
Fate would soon have him gored!
She was his anodyne,
In his sickness and pain.
She was his amulet,
That brought him only gain.
Hasty, his desires grew;
As he willed to own her.
Taking someone for granted-
Something that would haunt him forever.
And when she left,
Shattered- he remained.
Reality dawned on him,
He had lost what he had gained.
She was his;
For, that's what he had thought.
Fate had played its fall;
A plot- which he had miserably lost!
20 comments:
sid... writes:
Niiice...
Happy times, or so they seemed;
Her essence had him floored.
Little was he to know,
Fate would soon have him gored!
loved these lines
By anonymous user, # 8. September 2008, 18:00:54
Palaniappan writes:
the poem was great...:)
By anonymous user, # 9. September 2008, 12:38:41
Manikandan writes:
Nice one...
Loved the rhymes...
Loved the concept...
Keep writing!!
By anonymous user, # 9. September 2008, 05:28:54
@Sid
Thanks, dude... Glad you liked it.
By Karthik.S, # 8. September 2008, 18:09:05
That was beautiful though so painful!
Thank you for the lovely string of comments you left behind over at my place.Will be back for more :)
It was but a pleasure.
Thank you for dropping by, and have a nice day.
I like this...
I love poetry like this - dark, passionate and a little bit mysterious. You manage to take the plot of a novel and condense it into a poem. Great stuff!
Oooo, another superbly done one! I liked this one loads! Although at times the rhymes might seem a little forced, overall I thought it was excellent and I loved the way fate played around with him, ect. such an easy thing to happen in real life. Great job on this one! Keep writing!
I admire the strenght in this poem , as well as the sadness and loss inside each of the words you have portrayed before us.
Love the picture
well done
And when she left,
Shattered- he remained.
Reality dawned on him,
He had lost what he had gained.
I agree with mirth you showed a lot of strenth and courage in this poem and it is something to be admired.
good luck
Kartz,
This was just what i asked for Great job...i felt the strenght of it from the very beginning. You have a power over words, that much is evident! Great work! Keep writing..you're very talented!
This is quite an interesting piece. Fate certainly is a twisted character. Your rhyming is nice and fits with the way you're telling the story. It reminded me a lot of old greek tales. Nice work!
The rhyming is nice and the poem is great!
Awesome !!
Thank you Sneha...
i ve a doubt..!
who is this he n she??? :)
Hey Mishu...
Welcome to Contorted Reality. My blog mish'd u... :) And your doubt... Ummm... :P"
wonderfully conceived and well written... each word is rich with emotions... lovely read!!
@ Mona
Gee... Thanks for the kind words...
Loved the imagery and the metaphors! Keep the words flowing!
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