... Leaving a gaping void,
In this heart that has managed to stay buoyed.
... Left alone in the lurch,
I searched, but in vain, for my Lords church.
... It seemed your job was done,
For our string had come undone.
You departed from my soul,
... Leaving behind a living ghoul.
I was but shattered, grimacing in agony and pain;
... Ne'er would I be the same again!
I cry alone, here forlorn...
Now, that you are forever gone.
My cries have now reduced to a sob.
... The heart, still wincing, continues to throb...
I miss you loads, downcast I remain;
Ah... Good times do but little to anodyne that inner pain.
I'd always tried, to be the perfect lover...
But all I wish now- to be united with you forever!
A time will come, whence I too shalt rest.
Ne'er again... Shalt we remain at His behest...
32 comments:
Last two stanzas were amazing,i just loved it
:):)
lots of feelings in that poem
good one:)
nicely penned... although, i hope it's a third person recital.
That was dark but lovely! :)
Its strange how all good things in life always come to an end... Love they say Lives forever... But, if it only did for real!!! Its strange how life seems so meaningless once love leaves!!!! It feels so empty..
And we all try to be the perfect lovers(as u say in ur last stanza) when we are in love,... only to know later that wat was perfect for us, was probably not enough for the person who left us, devastated in love!!!!
Love is sweet and painful. People miss or long for others and the time helps to heal and know the other person more or much better.
i dunno but i lost track here .. the second para .. please help me out with that one .. for i find it to represent a totally diff theme from the rest of the poem ..
sry for my inadequacy ...
simply marvellous i loved the style of sorrow + pain
and specially the last para. lovely.
very touching post..
A time will come, whence I too shalt rest.Ne'er again... Shalt we remain at His behest...
nothing does last for ever..
last stanza was amazing. I felt the pain. beautifully written :)
@Gauri Mathur
Thanks buddy... Glad you liked it.
@Praveen
Thanks bro'...
@Divya
:)
@Sameera
Thank you. There is beauty in darkness...
@Diva
I won't say it's strange dear... Nothing is forever. I dunno about this 'love' though. Is it all-pervasive? I will find out some day... I guess...
@Priya
Yes, time- ultimate healer... Thank you for your thoughts.
@Descrying the shadows
Thanks for reading bro'... Well, It isn't quite off track. He feels that she has gone, prematurely, and their physical togetherness ended abruptly. Which... To him, seems grossly unfair.
Hope you can comprehend now...
Peace.
@Priya Joyce
Gratias...
@Ani
Indeed... Thanks for reading. :)
@Preeti
:) Merci, madamoiselle...
Kartz this is just beautiful!
very nicely written
full of feeling and rhythm :)
beautiful! :)
Gratias... :)
oops sorry I typed it wrong It was sorrow + happiness.
@Priya Joyce
:) No prob. Ironic, I preferred the first one. ;) Cheers...
Awesome
Outstanding
Great
@Tshhar
Thanks for the kind words bro'...
wow.. tat was really really painfully beautiful... i actually got tears in my eyes in the last 2 stanzas.. u alright? :)
cheers
Hi Archana! So good to hear from you again... :) And yes, am well. Thanks for asking! Hope you are doing well too.
And thanks for your feedback. :)
simply speechless...
@lavanya
:)
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